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Title: What Am I?
Post by: Drauka on June 08, 2004, 03:29:49 AM
I have seven or eight poems that are in the same style, and it annoys me. So finnally I decidd everyone has a style that just comes out when they write

What Am I
I am the holy faithless. I am the masked faceless. I am the skilled graceless.
I am a labourless peasant. I am a curvless crescent. I am the unenjoyed pleasant.
I am the weak power. I am the sweet sour. I am the first, last hour.
I am the truthful lie. I am the unwatching eye. I am the uncolored dye.
I am the holy hell. I am the unrung bell. I am the sick feeling well.
I am a local tourist. I am a defiling purist. I am the quitting endurist.
I am a flock of flightless hawks. I am basically unorthodox. I am a simple paradox.
What are you?
 


Title: What Am I?
Post by: mole on June 08, 2004, 04:15:24 PM
nice poem but its sympathetic to my mood and thats bad


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Perdition on June 08, 2004, 05:36:59 PM
love it.  you are just wow *goes back to planning to steal drauka's brain*


Title: What Am I?
Post by: RipperRoo on June 08, 2004, 07:56:42 PM
Some of the rhyming is very tenuous, but other than that its great.


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Uber Peasant on June 09, 2004, 11:44:57 AM
talking bout the peasants- :cool:

nice poem, and nice that you got it to rhyme. hate those oens that dont...


Title: What Am I?
Post by: mole on June 09, 2004, 01:49:42 PM
hey i like poems that dont rhyme a lot more


Title: What Am I?
Post by: RipperRoo on June 09, 2004, 03:48:29 PM
Im with peasant on this one, poems that dont rhyme or scan arent even poems, just a collection of words...


Title: What Am I?
Post by: SS on June 09, 2004, 04:22:15 PM
Poems don't need to rhyme (although I prefer ones that do), but scanning is important. If the words don't flow gracefully, then it's just a collection of words.


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Rug on June 09, 2004, 07:28:12 PM
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I have seven or eight poems that are in the same style, and it annoys me. So finnally I decidd everyone has a style that just comes out when they write

What Am I
I am the holy faithless. I am the masked faceless. I am the skilled graceless.
I am a labourless peasant. I am a curvless crescent. I am the unenjoyed pleasant.
I am the weak power. I am the sweet sour. I am the first, last hour.
I am the truthful lie. I am the unwatching eye. I am the uncolored dye.
I am the holy hell. I am the unrung bell. I am the sick feeling well.
I am a local tourist. I am a defiling purist. I am the quitting endurist.
I am a flock of flightless hawks. I am basically unorthodox. I am a simple paradox.
What are you?
Sounds a LOT like Rotting Christ lyrics. Making it good. :).


Title: What Am I?
Post by: mole on June 09, 2004, 08:10:10 PM
drivel i love poems that dont rhyme or atleast dont rhyme anything liek this one must be some pshychological enjoyment of eratic and different things


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Drauka on June 11, 2004, 07:20:30 AM
Damnit you know there are at least four people in this thread who know who the daughter of the nine moons is.


That pisses me off. If I wanted wheel of time signatures I would goto the offical forum.

And who the heck is rotting christ?


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Uber Peasant on June 11, 2004, 11:50:00 AM
think its a band.

otherwise woudlnt a name like that get tagged for politiaclly correct stuffs (chrisitan peeps complaning and all)


Title: What Am I?
Post by: mole on June 11, 2004, 12:03:49 PM
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four people in this thread who know who the daughter of the nine moons is.

including yourself

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think its a band.

tis


Title: What Am I?
Post by: ns33 on June 11, 2004, 05:55:12 PM
I know the daughter of the nine moons. (Did I say that right?  :paranoid: )


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Perdition on June 11, 2004, 06:01:48 PM
Drauka why did you get rid of your sig?  I liked it  :(  


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Drauka on June 12, 2004, 08:07:50 AM
I didn't its long, and I try not to post it often as it even annoys me if I post to much.
But here you go, pal. This is a spammy post, just for you. A brilliant mod you are, lol.


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Perdition on June 12, 2004, 03:08:04 PM
:)  *gives drauka a cookie*


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Rug on June 12, 2004, 06:06:06 PM
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"Ad Noctis"
... I am the healer and the deceiver
I am the sober eye of fate
I always take to be the giver
I am the crimson eye of hate

My love is sloth corrupting order
I am the secret hand of pain
I am the builder of this wanderland
My face is known by the insane ...


Title: What Am I?
Post by: Guest on June 13, 2004, 04:41:41 AM
Um. I see not the relatance...